Good: Reminds me of Rez from Gex: Enter the Gecko (PS1). It's an interesting effect. I hear no recording noise or artifacts and the effect seems to apply well.
Bad: Either your S's (and x's) are too long or you ended up with some strange hissing in the recording, I can't tell which; but I think it's your effect not working the same on the s sound.
Also your emphasis on some of the words is a bit -too- over the top: I, DIE, NOW. Inversely some of your dialogue is almost impossible to understand because it's too quiet compared to the echoing/reverb of other words; in other words your dynamics need to be tighter.
Also, 'taking you with me' feels too fast...and nothing after that line is intelligible at all.
Overall:
I like your effects/editing but your actual voice work, pacing, dynamics etc. can definitely use work.